The Wall I'm Up Against
Jan. 8th, 2007 06:06 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
talkstowolvesSo, I just scrapped most of the lovely plans for my senior class this year (Popular Media) in favor of a WRITING WORKSHOP. You see, my seniors desperately need to learn how to write. Last week, I asked them all to write an essay about why they think college is important: this is the first thing they'll be passing around in their peer- and teacher-reviewed workshop. This "essay" by one of my students encapsulates the reasons why this entire reformatting of the class is necessary in the first place:
Why is College important?
Why is College important to me? I never really thought about it. Well, I guess college important. College is like a school to higher your educatin. That's what most people say.
College help you with the career that you are interest in. Like me, for example I want to be an Nurse. To became a Nurse I have to go to college, get an degree saying that I was train or have the educatin to be that. So have to get an degree.
I always wonder what it would be like. Would feel that important, or just getting the money (work after highschool). I think I'll just go.
Really college is very important. It's for interested people. Maybe a little fun.
In conclusiun college is for everyone and anyone. Everyone should go after high school. Higer they educatin. Be something in life.
.......
Best Essay Received:
Why college is important?
College is important because you will continue to learn bigger and more things. You should go to college to learn responsibility.
College is where you go to get more knowledge. When you go to college you should pick out what you like to learn about, so you pick something to take up to make money.
College is really important because you will need a college education to get a good job. If you do not get a good job you would not be able to take care of your family like you should.
College is where you start off as a grown up. You will learn more things. You will be able to handle your self as a grown up.
College is fun. You will meet new people. You will also explore the world.
.......
I hate to say it, but this last essay had a clarity and sentence cohesion that every other essay lacked. It's truly sad. Wish me luck and pray that this workshop has some effect.
Hail Workshop! We (English teachers) who are about to die salute you!
Why is College important to me? I never really thought about it. Well, I guess college important. College is like a school to higher your educatin. That's what most people say.
College help you with the career that you are interest in. Like me, for example I want to be an Nurse. To became a Nurse I have to go to college, get an degree saying that I was train or have the educatin to be that. So have to get an degree.
I always wonder what it would be like. Would feel that important, or just getting the money (work after highschool). I think I'll just go.
Really college is very important. It's for interested people. Maybe a little fun.
In conclusiun college is for everyone and anyone. Everyone should go after high school. Higer they educatin. Be something in life.
.......
Best Essay Received:
College is important because you will continue to learn bigger and more things. You should go to college to learn responsibility.
College is where you go to get more knowledge. When you go to college you should pick out what you like to learn about, so you pick something to take up to make money.
College is really important because you will need a college education to get a good job. If you do not get a good job you would not be able to take care of your family like you should.
College is where you start off as a grown up. You will learn more things. You will be able to handle your self as a grown up.
College is fun. You will meet new people. You will also explore the world.
.......
I hate to say it, but this last essay had a clarity and sentence cohesion that every other essay lacked. It's truly sad. Wish me luck and pray that this workshop has some effect.
Hail Workshop! We (English teachers) who are about to die salute you!